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Firestorm~ or "California burn'n"
10/27/03


Frenzied blaze,
flames of death,
wild, swirling Efreet
dance on desert breath.
Over the sky
an ashen shroud,
cinders snow
upon parched ground.
The air chokes;
You cannot breath.
The brush stokes;
You cannot leave.
Unstoppable,
Devil's spell.
Unquenchable;
Paradise turned hell.

Plead for your deliverance
under the ruddy glare
of Armageddon sun.

------
"I must create my own system, or be enslaved by another man's"-William Blake



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The following comments are for "Firestorm"
by Malthis

feel the flames
its like being caught up in the swirling flames. A well choreographed and executed number. I'm burning up....

( Posted by: Smithy [Member] On: November 4, 2003 )

Fiery
A fire evokes such myriad of emotions you capture them well.The ending of the first paragraph is nice.
(Unstoppable,
Devil's spell.
Unquenchable;
Paradise turned hell.)

Fiery Poetry !! Congrats

( Posted by: RightingIt [Member] On: February 7, 2004 )





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