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~Note: I wrote this awhile ago, excuse me if it's bad.~

You left me in a cloud.

A swirl of confusing thoughts.

I sit here, pondering still, why you have left me.

Why?

That night, you spoke those words.

Those bloody words from hell!!

I hated you, yet wanted you.

Just once more, give me the comfort.

To stroke my hair, be by my side, whispering "I love you."

Like the old times.

When we were young and naive.

Surrendering to our undying love,

For each other.

..My darkest hour had passed that night.

All alone, those words..

Etched in my memory for all infinity.

Never to part, to stay.

Still again, that moment replays over my head.

Though it has been years.

"I'm leaving," you say.

"How long?" I ask, unconcerned.

"Forever," you reply.

Then out the door you go,

Not looking back, not even one last time.

..Forever?

If he is gone forever, why do I ache for his love even now?

To remember the joyous moments we had,

Is that all I have left?

Pathetic memories.

That's it. Nothing more.

Lost, wandering, that's what I am.

I walk alone, hoping one day you'll come back,

Even against all odds.

Open your heart once more,

Let me fill it in.

With love and affection.

An eternal bond of fiery love.

Don't leave me like this.

Please.

Is that too much to ask?

~So what do you think? Review.~


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The following comments are for "Forever Gone"
by Cryptic Rapture

I like it
You've written it well. It's the way I often feel about my last girlfriend. She chose to go, so I see it from the opposite end.

( Posted by: Storyteller [Member] On: November 7, 2003 )

Hmmm
The sadness to anger ratio in this poem was kinda shocking. At first great sadness then quick and violent anger. I am not sure if that was what you were going for but that is what I saw in it. Interesting and unique even if it is a poem of the lost love genre.

( Posted by: Drastine [Member] On: November 24, 2003 )





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