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CEMETERIES




I often think of them.

In the crazy city
they are like small lakes
of calm & beauty.

They are also good places
to hunt for mushrooms
although most people
are horrified at the thought
of eating a graveyard mushroom
as though it had roots
& sprang
from the eye of a corpse.

Why do we have graveyards?
In case people do eventually
raise from the dead
then we'll know exactly where to find them?

To find them.
Brothers & sisters
if you're looking for death
you don't have to look very far.

And what about all the dead
& nobody knows where they're buried?
Why don't we have a
"Tomb of the Unknown Pauper?"

How will the cremated
raise from the dead?
Will you feel the brush
of an ash against your cheek?

I've never seen a ghost
but if I do
I'll just tell myself
that spirits have to come up
for a breath of air
once in awhile.

Kind of like a turtle.
Or one of them walking catfish.

Now that's scary.
The dead rising
like catfish walking about!

What will death think of next?

That's the trouble.
Death makes up its own rules
& you lose.

But it's not so really serious
all these graveyards
& crematoriums.

Unless there's a boot on your throat.

The trick is to take life
as seriously
as you take death.

And hope someone tosses a rose
on your grave.

Or tosses petals into the wind
for you burned-up ones.

Cemeteries.

I often think of them.


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The following comments are for "CEMETERIES"
by gomarsoap

@Gomar~
You so funni!!!
Grave-yard mushroom {hahaha}
why not just "mushrooms"

though I must say, I really liked this gomar. good job

Blessings
{{{Jeannie}}}

( Posted by: JEANNIE45 [Member] On: October 29, 2003 )

About your poem:
I must say, I was rather amused by that particular line about "graveyard mushroom" in the third verse. I never thought of a graveyard like that. I don't really fear cemeteries logically, but for some reason I always get a sense of dread when around one. I don't think too much about cemeteries, but more on the subject of death. I especially liked
this stanza: The trick is to take life
as seriously as you take death.
I feel this is true, you should take life as seriously as death. You don't want to waste your whole life doing nothing, and then suddenly die without accomplishing something somewhat significant. Nice job on the poem, and thanks for reviewing one of mine.

( Posted by: Cryptic Rapture [Member] On: October 31, 2003 )

fun
A really fun bit of reflection and imagination! I had a great time reading this poem -- please give us more!

( Posted by: viper9 [Member] On: October 31, 2003 )

nice flow
the conversational tone of the poem makes it flow really well.. the part that stood out the most for me was,
"..spirits have to come up
for a breath of air
once in awhile."

( Posted by: pixie [Member] On: November 3, 2003 )

Resurrection
Nice string of images, and a very soft, thoughtful voice with just that little undercurrent of the smart ass, but that voice is softened in contemplation of the big D. The lines 'small lakes of calm and beauty,' and 'the brush of ash against your cheek,' and the image of the roses on the wind, these snapped me back to the seriousness of the piece, contemplation of death. Nice work, Strong voice. I usually hate reading poetry because its always so full of itself. In this piece you kept it in reach for us little people without coming down from from the high mountain of ideas and dreams. In fact, you parted the clouds and gave us a glimpse of the mountaintop!
I've always wondered if we didn't keep our dead nearby just for the reason you mentioned, in hopes of one day resurrecting them! Maybe deep down, intuitively we know this might happen, or maybe just a hope, thus we mark the spot. But I'm getting off the point here and into S.F. and the practical resurrection theory. Keep it up! You got me thinking and that's exactly what poetry should do.

( Posted by: a.k.a. Sas [Member] On: November 8, 2003 )

thanx, sas, pixie, et al
Thanks for the input. I've struggled trying to get this poem right. Still have a few spots that don't please me. But I'm having fun getting it the way I want.

( Posted by: gomarsoap [Member] On: November 8, 2003 )

Mushrooms
After all your compliments, gomarsoap, I had to come find out what you're about. ;)

I found myself smiling a lot through this. Funny, I just saw something about pigs rooting for mushrooms (truffles) in graveyards on t.v. a few days ago. There's so many different things going on in this poem, but at the same time, I felt each "piece" (sorry-- not a poet, so I don't know the correct terminology) segued comfortably and smoothly into the next. And the imagery coupled with the words... very rich and clear.

"And what about all the dead
& nobody knows where they're buried?"
-- That's chilling to me. I'm getting cremated, so that's just fuel for my fire... so to speak.

I really liked this. Great job.

( Posted by: Elphaba [Member] On: November 8, 2003 )

thanks
Really good, Bob. I particularly liked the lines:

The trick is to take life
as seriously
as you take death.

And hope someone tosses a rose
on your grave.

Or tosses petals into the wind
for you burned-up ones.


beautiful work, man.


john

( Posted by: johnlibertus [Member] On: March 31, 2004 )





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