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I look forward to
the time
when
you and I will
gallop unicorns
scale mountains
deep sea-dive oceans
climb waterfalls
hopscotch stars
race whirlwinds
strum rainbows
and
dance windsongs
understanding

then we'll remember our perfect
earthbound bodies our
with a wink
of an in

eye Light
the
to
as we are airborne


Esther McIlveen

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Esther McIlveen



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The following comments are for "In Flight"
by a1a63257

some nice ideas
I liked the idea of strumming rainbows and hopscotching stars, but i struggled with the last two stanzas. Maybe, there's a word or two missing??? A little like catching the fragmants of a song carried on the winds....smithy

( Posted by: smithy [Member] On: November 14, 2003 )





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