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Altered cult finding fault
Gotta go with what you know
Halt the blow
it doesn't show
fight the foe
and always bolt.

A mixed fix of blitzed shit
a fine line
of licks and kicks
off the vine,
champing bit.

The wrong song
Behind the grind
so long to find my mind
where to belong.

Be strong
Fight blind
take six
What's mine
don't show
revolt

------
-Lu


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The following comments are for "six"
by Lu

whee!
I love the fast pace of this. I'd probably chew my tongue out if I tried to read it aloud. It's got an amusement park ride feel to it--all you can do is hang on and go along.

( Posted by: Jei [Member] On: October 21, 2003 )

ohhh ahhhh
very good. I really liked the feeling behind this. it has a nice flow-y feel...i commend you ...
on a good poem

( Posted by: snuffystuff [Member] On: October 22, 2003 )

Indeed
Agreeing with Jei I say the fast pace is great.

( Posted by: underabell [Member] On: July 1, 2004 )





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