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Got a letter from an old friend seemed he fell on better days
Said he wasn’t a drunken saint out of control said that was just a phase
Caroline shook her head and laughed and said “Old people don’t ever change.”
I swear that girl’s a locked room with painted windows
Madly in love with her pain
People watch like so may cameras
And it all looks like some gray parade
And you suppose you’ve never been as lonely as them
You supposed you’ve never been as afraid
OK so maybe you’ve been slapped around more than your share
Got every reason in the world to hide
Maybe the best is the worst and you’re cursed
But damn it you’re still alive

Our faces can shift in violent twists
Like shadows under lightning flashes
But me, I’d rather be the fire
Than spend my time
Praising the ashes

Got a letter from an old friend telling me what he’d been through
As his condition worsens he takes the lesson because all past accounts come due
And he told me about his baby sister, remember we all thought she wasn’t right?
Seems she stayed in on a Saturday night
Shining with promise shaking in fright
Filled up the bath tub and took a knife
Filled up the bath tub and took her life
And part of me tried to understand
Te rest of me fell to the floor
Remembering too many 4 a.m.’s
That I couldn’t stand anymore
Beauty’s in the eye of the beholder I guess
Who among us now can say he knows what’s best
When it comes to fixing someone else’s emptiness?

Our faces can shift................


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The following comments are for "Praising the Ashes"
by tim55b

Real fine piece of writing - maintains it's strength from start to finish. Some really good images ("a locked room with painted windows"). Tells a story with insight and wisdom.

Without going into details, I think it could be tightened up a bit here & there, but it's pretty fine the way it is.

( Posted by: gomarsoap [Member] On: October 22, 2003 )

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