Lit.Org - a community for readers and writers Advanced Search
 




Average Rating
0.00

(0 votes)

You must login to vote

I know your secret butterfly
No more the pure sweet innocent
No more your fragile wings or colours
Will fool my wisened eye

Vanity you think you hide
Rises to the surface
Flutter there, you grace our midst
And gain too, from the compliments
We pay you, I have seen through
Your careless love of human company
You pose for me
Expecting exclamations of your beauty
Oh, vain creature, in disguise
I know you now
Oh vain creature of the skies
I know you now


------
The answer to EVERYTHING!!!:- The Cycle.
Spread the word man!


Related Items

Comments

The following comments are for "Butterfly - No More The Pure Sweet Innocent"
by A. Cain

Nice
I liked this...the observation it holds, and the analyzing of the character. great choice on use of "wisened". :) Namaste~

( Posted by: satori [Member] On: October 20, 2003 )

hmm, sounds familiar
I know a butterfly or two flitting around these parts. I like the slightly-alterred repetition at the end.

( Posted by: Jei [Member] On: October 21, 2003 )

fly on
You've captured the essence of vanity and the ego as a butterfly beautifally. Love the variation and rhmying elements. Mystic, yet worldly!

( Posted by: smithy [Member] On: October 30, 2003 )

Great Write
You have done a wonderful job on this. Very descriptive. *S* Cynthia

( Posted by: KindHearted [Member] On: December 4, 2004 )





Add Your Comment

You Must be a member to post comments and ratings. If you are NOT already a member, signup now it only takes a few seconds!

All Fields are required

Commenting Guidelines:
  • All comments must be about the writing. Non-related comments will be deleted.
  • Flaming, derogatory or messages attacking other members well be deleted.
  • Adult/Sexual comments or messages will be deleted.
  • All subjects MUST be PG. No cursing in subjects.
  • All comments must follow the sites posting guidelines.
The purpose of commenting on Lit.Org is to help writers improve their writing. Please post constructive feedback to help the author improve their work.


Username:
Password:
Subject:
Comment:





Login:
Password: