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perception the plaything of gods and men,
how is it we are back here again?

to stand and wait for Those Who Must Come.
eyes open, unseeing, confidant,dumb.

A path is wrought by the traveler's heart.
perception twists our glorious start.

and we are here again to see,
the journey's not far..it's only me.

and back at the start you see some day.
though it never will finish, to be on the way,

means to see that to lose one's direction and drive.
is all just a process, are you truly alive....

to simply stand still, one can hear what is lost,
on the paths we travel there is always a cost.

and to feel astray is a natural thing.
we must always reorient the way we are going.....


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The following comments are for "lost and found/fishing in the dark."
by wally 5

Awkward
This poem is awkwardly written but it is full of beauty & insight.

Line #1 has got to be re-written - it is simply too male-oriented-sounding considering the universal theme of your poem, which is what I like the best about it.

And the last line is really bad - it just goes "clunk."

Line #4 I really love - full of contradiction & truth.

( Posted by: gomarsoap [Member] On: October 19, 2003 )

liked it
I liked the poem, though I agree with gomarsoap about the last line.

But regarding the first, gomarsoap has a good point. You should change it to "gods and folks" or "gods and my peeps" or "gods and puppies" -- anything ridiculous. As long as gomarsoap isn't offended!

( Posted by: Viper9 [Member] On: October 19, 2003 )





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