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You strut your stuff every time I see you
On the bus, down the street, in the mall
Thinking it's 1985 and you are the best there is.
Your hair, your style, your attitude,
Are all copies of a relic that has passed
Into time and onto midafternoon cable.
You aren't getting the attention you crave
Because it's been seen, it's been done
Twenty years ago before you knew what it was.
Straighten your collar, poof your hair, roll up those sleeves
And maybe you'll find what you're looking for
Behind those sunglasses and in those sockless-shoes.
People don't hate you because you're beautiful
They mock you because you've forgotten how to advance
Not for what you want to be and what they can't.
Rolling eyes and giggle behind fists
Follow you everywhere you go
But you don't care - it's all jealousy.

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The following comments are for "Don"
by Xlnt_1

Mssg. from Don
Yeh, but I can still party & do the wild thing. Love, Don.

( Posted by: gomarsoap [Member] On: October 16, 2003 )

Excellent portrait
Portrait of the artist as a young yuppie? Excellent work! I see Don Johnson in his massive windshield shades and pastel shirt, sleeves rolled up . . . just like mine . . .

Oh crap.

( Posted by: Boy Howdy [Member] On: October 16, 2003 )

there's a guy who gets on my bus every day who, i think, lives like it's 1985. with the weather getting cooler right now, it's not as obvious - except the hair - but during the summer, you'd swear you were on the set of miami vice. to each their own, but i just get a kick out of this guy.

( Posted by: xlnt_1 [Member] On: October 16, 2003 )

Another Xcelent Tale
This story reminds me of this guy who is into surfing.. in new Jersey. There is no surfing in New Jersy, but he lugs his board around anyhow.. What a loser.

( Posted by: Bigyellowmonkey [Member] On: October 21, 2003 )

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