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Love is like a runaaway train
Unpredictable like wavelengths flowing through the brain
Feelings varies but will never be the same

Love is like an ocean surrounded by the rocks
Like a family washing each others dirty socks
Time goes on but their really are no clocks

Love is like a slow dance to a sweet love song
And don't forget about your woman in sexy thong
You always share your problems when their's something wrong

Love is when the sun kisses the moon
How about when sharing the same spoon
Every year love ones look forward to their honeymoon

Love is a candy apple in disguise
The twinkle reflection in your eyes
Love is writing a letter that never dies!

By: Luther T. Collins


The following comments are for "Love Is"
by L.T.

Love is...
Indeed all these things you described and more. I think this was a pretty poem with a few mistakes in the flow of the rhyme. It brought tears to my eyes. That may just be me though...=D Keep it up.

( Posted by: Darkshine Raven [Member] On: October 14, 2003 )

fell apart
This poem really fell apart with the last 4 lines. The first few lines were kick ass, made me say yes, even a misty-eyed yes. But then the poem doesn't go where it needs to go. And the middle part - you need to go back & get it down right.
(So said the critic as he adjusted his thong). Actually, if this were one of my poems, I would revise it severely, but, I would keep something about a thong in there. Something about people wearing thongs & laying around & having a serious conversation. That's probably how it should be. Bare-assed-thong-naked. As if we were gods & godesses which I'm sure we agree is how it all should be.

( Posted by: gomarsoap [Member] On: October 14, 2003 )

I think it was great

( Posted by: suez-q [Member] On: October 14, 2003 )

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