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Muted Circus. Roll up.
Nothing left. nothing gained. nothing thrown away.
crystal beginnings. first layer of skin eruptions.
This is why I came.

Not for you. Not for me.
but for those who sit. stand. stained in their hypocricy.
lost in their foolish cafes and coffee clouds.
Mention the thought and you'll be sorry.

And why did you come here? was it to dwell in your educated splendour?
No? tell me? you're not hungry? are you?
You're not who I thought you once were.
Oh, that is why you came.

Roll up! explain the chances to the Marqui de Sade.
This is nothing but a sideshow, I wanted the circus ring.
And now i stand alone in this autumn field.
I guess, this is the silent reason, the reason that I came.


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by The Universal mind

Idea?
This sounds like an idea for something. Kind of like something you need to look at again and ask yourself what it is you are trying to say. How the hell did the Marquis get in there? I was more intrigued with the circus angle.

( Posted by: gomarsoap [Member] On: October 14, 2003 )

Circus
I loved the line "lost in their foolish cafes and coffee clouds"... You had really great wording of things...as if you were telling someone off in a beautiful way...

( Posted by: MerryJayned [Member] On: October 14, 2003 )

con. cise.
well done.
really great balance of large scale ideas and specific details. moving from splendour to hunger... yes. something tangible and grounded, the sort of thing i'm always craving in a poem.
i Especially like Your varyinG use of The shift key. ah-- for capitalization to always be used this consciously!

( Posted by: ark [Member] On: November 3, 2003 )





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