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Every day the rope around her neck draws itself into the ceiling a little more and makes her struggle to stay on the ground. She must know she will lose, she must know that soon the noose will close and she will gasp, choke and die. Why do these creatures fight so hard against the inevitable? Bend your knees and it ends in a minute, go en pointe and it lingers. If it were not for my toy's tenacity I would have so little fun.

Playing stickball with the trunkless head, the children laugh at the squish it makes colliding with a rock. A preschooler finger-paints a picture of Mommy in the stranger's thickening blood.

Black men tearing the skin from their white oppressors to see what makes them better and being disappointed to find the answer is fuck all.

A manling, recently removed from his limbs, sits sullenly in the corner spitting bile at passers. They easily dodge his tithe amid their laughter. A young girl kicks him once to spin him to the wall and then again for giggles. Small worms crawl about in the open weeping sores of former arms.

Scalpels slice off lips, eyelids, cheeks and nostrils to feed the swine that pace the floors, slipping on the blood of their fodder.

Straight razor fuckings take place en masse in the dark of a cold world's love. Sweaty backs black with dirt match the minds of the rutting dead.

I am Monastic Vice

But would I be a good Messiah with my low self-esteem? / If I don't believe in myself would that be blasphemy? - The Bloodhound Gang Hell Yeah

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The following comments are for "Monastic Vice Episode II"
by enforced bliss

I don't like this one as much, I hate to say it but perhaps the novelty has evaporated leaving me to wonder if you have a plot or if you just intend to make me sick! =D

Interesting though...not something to read late at night, that's for sure.

( Posted by: Darkshine Raven [Member] On: October 11, 2003 )

The intent is, aside from personaly experimental, to be as black, as disturbing and basically as horrible while I can while maintaining an allegorical whole.

Part of the pleasure that I take in Monastic Vice has been the varied reactions to it and the people from whom they've come. I like psychology.

The whole is variations on a theme. The whole is of the same style. Dome installements are "worse" than others. I have been choosing intentionaly tame episodes intentionaly.

Thus far I have enjoyed the experiment and its results.

So to answer your question in brief; no my specific intention was not to make you or anyone else sick, but yes it was to provoke a reaction.

Be well,


( Posted by: Enforced Bliss [Member] On: October 11, 2003 )

Well, my personal reaction was to gag a couple of times. Whether that was because I'd had nothing but coffee at the time remains to be seen.

My question was the same as Darkshine's, whether there will be a plot. Am I completely misreading you in thinking there's not going to be one? Honestly, based on the impact of your first installment, I was really looking forward to a "story": something more complete than these vignettes.

( Posted by: Elphaba [Member] On: October 12, 2003 )

Reading this stuff reminds me of the cover from one of Jethro Tull's albums.

( Posted by: kimberly bird [Member] On: October 12, 2003 )

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