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you are beautiful
with wisdom to match
your elastic soul
and body are forever
in my heart
i can see you beating there
for miles
and centuries pass
what's one dirty foot
if the other one's clean?
the amount i love you is obscene
and hey now
if we're not careful
we'll die together
sipping stars

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honeeeeeeeeeeeey, you betta get tha other record! okay?!



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The following comments are for "snakes will tell you"
by honeyplease

title
I really don't understand how the title relates to the poem, maybe it's just me but I am not sure on that point either.

( Posted by: 42 suicidal mules [Member] On: October 11, 2003 )

snakes
actually, the title has not much to do with the peom. they were words plucked from a conversation i was having with my husband at the time i was typing. he was telling me about how you know when a snake is going to bite you. he's had a few pet snakes in his time.

( Posted by: honeyplease [Member] On: October 11, 2003 )

Hlep with one line
Hi Honeyplease. I enjoyed reading this, but could you give me a hint on the line "i can see you beating there
for miles"

I liked the rest.

( Posted by: captainkeyboard [Member] On: March 15, 2004 )





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