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Every women has the idea of the perfect man
whether he be like her father or the opposite of him
the idea of a man to protect her through anything
a man that can support her
one that will be there for her at her first call
one that thinks of her needs before his own
some call him a soul mate
he feels what she feels,thinks the same thoughts
before he makes a move in life he says"how will this affect her"
but will every woman wait and wait for him
is he out there,will she ever come across him
is that what love is all about
can you love a man who doesn't start out that way
who loves you so much and cares so much about you
would you pass him by because of different intrests and ideas
waiting for some imaginary man
or in time blend the different things together
learn to love the same things,become one
maybe he isn't so imaginary after all
maybe he's right there in front of you
don't pass him by
he loves you,thinks of every little thing about you
does so much to make you happy
he can't even sleep without holding you tight
this is indeed your soul mate.



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The following comments are for "Soul Mate"
by suez-q

Soul Mate
So sweet.

( Posted by: Susan Sparks [Member] On: October 12, 2003 )

lovely
This is lovely. My only little gripe comes with the first two words... perhaps you could consider changing 'Every woman' to 'every bored, lonely, hetrosexual woman who isn't too busy concerning herself with other nasty problems, like starving to death, or engaged in something even vaguely useful, like going out with their friends, going to work or, hell, even watching tele'.
If you think that might disrupt the flow, I'd settle for just 'every woman except lu'.

( Posted by: Lu [Member] On: October 12, 2003 )

Heart
The line "can you love a man who doesn't start out that way" - the answer, I would say, is probably not. But then again, when you fall in love you takes your chances.

I can see where you're coming from, but overall, I think this piece is a little too idealistic the way it's written. But I can sure understand the yearning. There's certainly nothing wrong with your heart.

( Posted by: gomarsoap [Member] On: October 19, 2003 )





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