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Carnival Mirror
by Ae (Member) - published: October 10, 2003
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Category - Haiku
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she sees in his eyes
a smiling red-mouthed woman
she will never be


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by Ae

Alice!
Your Alice sounds a bit like my Alice. She sees a lot of things she will never be, but knows of the horrible parts of herself.

8/10

( Posted by: Vember Judgement [Member] On: October 10, 2003 )

haiku!
This is one damn fine haiku. I hear Zen brooms scratching across a floor.

( Posted by: gomarsoap [Member] On: October 10, 2003 )

dead-on
No wayward arrows here. Every once and a while I read something and think "they got it right". You got it right, the haiku (senryu I suppose), and the title both.

( Posted by: PerennialMind [Member] On: April 5, 2004 )





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