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When I was young
I used to hang out
in skid row bars.


I thought I might learn something
about people & life.


I didn't learn much.


Everybody was too drunk.


Me, too.





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The following comments are for "ART"
by gomarsoap

Hey!
Sounds like MY childhood^_^

Though I wan't drunk, but a bit high...I like this.

( Posted by: Vember Judgement [Member] On: October 10, 2003 )

Sweeper!
I like this one. Light-hearted, but with substance.

( Posted by: ae [Member] On: October 10, 2003 )

Yay!
Bloody terrific! Loved it.

( Posted by: Viper9 [Member] On: October 10, 2003 )

terrific
Hey, this is great. Simple, but it actually says something rather important. Nice!

Safiyah

( Posted by: Safiyah [Member] On: October 10, 2003 )

Awful.
There's writing 'original' poetry and there's writing 'awful' poetry.I've read 400 poems so far on here.This is the worst. This IS awful.It says nothing new.Not worthy of 1/10.

( Posted by: Storyteller [Member] On: November 11, 2003 )

Harsh
I certainly don't think it's awful. The last two lines gave me a grin. And while it doesn't say much, it says *enough*.

Bars are nowhere to learn the meaning of life.

( Posted by: Elphaba [Member] On: November 11, 2003 )

Bars
I agree with Elphaba, "Bars are nowhere to learn the meaning of life." Man Storyteller has it in for your work, huh??? I thought it was rather funny!

( Posted by: nae411 [Member] On: May 11, 2004 )

ART
Boy those comments,I did'nt learn much either and I learned everything. Bars are no different than schools or churches when it comes to learning about human nature and many other things also. But I quit...did I say I liked the poem - gave it a 10.

( Posted by: Charmr [Member] On: June 27, 2004 )

them darts and pool
It is too short for something so intriguing.

You could elaborate on "the people," being "drunk", what the bars were like (pickled eggs in green brine? or better) but what was learned?

While drunk I learned to play darts and play pool and some tunes in country music!

Regardzz

Telefun

( Posted by: Teflon [Member] On: November 14, 2004 )

Tasha
Thanx. Hope you got some rest. I assume my short PM got through. Tonight I can't even get logged in.

P.S.: I am not Agape, either.

( Posted by: gomarsoap [Member] On: May 20, 2005 )





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