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orchid fresh
the softest flesh
with blueberry eyes
that see through lies
and golden hair
she hasnt a care
just sit with her
and you will see
exactly what
she means to me
the way she laughs
the way she cries
she always looks deeply
into my eyes
so undeserving is this cruel world
to be in the presence
of this beautiful girl


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The following comments are for "happiness"
by johnny

happiness
sounds a bit familiar...can't quite place it but i do recognize it from somwhere. still it was good

( Posted by: goddessin1 [Member] On: September 13, 2001 )

poetry
very sweet

( Posted by: suez-q [Member] On: October 12, 2003 )

*happiness
Oh! That's so sweet! Actually the weird part is it sounds like something my b/f would write for me if he had the time( between schoolwork and family issues, and other friends)

( Posted by: sk8trgrlac [Member] On: December 20, 2003 )





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