Slumber
by Vember Judgement (Member) - published: October 7, 2003
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Category - Poetry
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I hear you clearer now.
Imaginary whispers from your thin blue lips.
Burning every unlit part of me.
Unclean visions in my head.
Haunting me deeply.

A blanket for your frozen body.
Fair skin growing further gray.
I pray to whoever listens.
Please take away her slumber.
She belongs to me.

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My nipples are permanently flavored like tropical punch...No girl can resist me now.

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The following comments are for "Slumber"
by Vember Judgement

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This was so distressing that it contained immemnse beauty in it. Wow. Will catch up on those "Alice" series soon.

( Posted by: gaschamberblues [Member] On: October 8, 2003 )

damn
You dig the creepy, depressing, twisted stuff, dont' you? Well...good job! I like the way your poems are put together. Strong words, but you never pack the lines. One thing perhpaps...you might want to consider broadening your writing base. =D

( Posted by: Darkshine Raven [Member] On: October 8, 2003 )

Hrmph
Well, maybe not. One has a subject/style choice, and may stick with it. I really did like this, and I have no mess-ups if this writer sticks to the same base, really.

( Posted by: gaschamberblues [Member] On: October 8, 2003 )

@Vember & Alice
Raed the Alice entries, and they were all rather good. Especially excellent were Alice Loves and Alice Cries. Pummel on, I'm enjoying this. However, this had to be your best till now IMO.

( Posted by: gaschamberblues [Member] On: October 8, 2003 )

Necrophile Blues
Fine stuff. Not one bad line. Ravenous and sad love poem like a starving dog guarding a bone.

( Posted by: gomarsoap [Member] On: October 8, 2003 )

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