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I remember the way my feet beat out a rythmn on the
cement. It sounded vaguely like the echoing of hooves on a
cobblestone walkway. I pretended for a slight moment that
I was a horse galloping down that walkway in my mind.
There was absolutely nothing tying me down. I could just
run forever. I felt the breeze in my hair and on my skin and imagined it wisking away all the bad things in my life. They were lifted up and off of my body and into the air. Once airborne they became part of collective existence and they were no longer my pains alone to bear. That was the beauty of being a horse. Animals weren't individualists for sure but they were also never alone. I jumped through the air enjoying my freedom.

Abruptly I stopped. Terrible acidic pain burned inside my
lungs. I was no horse, that much was certainly true.
Horses didn't stop at stoplights to avoid being plowed
down by oncoming Ford pick-up trucks. Well,
occasionally they did, but certainly not when they knew
for a fact no such pick-up was anywhere near to them. I
shifted my weight as I waited for the light to change and
felt an indignant pang in my heel. I sat down on the
dusty, broken cement to examine the pain and found a sharp
brown pincher had lodged itself right where the heel gives
way to a more sensitive arch of the foot.

Stupid pincher. I pulled it gently out of the crease of
skin it was embedded in and winced in pain momentarily. It
came out and was immediately replaced by a trickle of
blood. I spit on my finger and rubbed it on the wound to
try and help plug the small cut. As I rubbed my finger
around the cut I noticed all the dirt clear from the small
area. My feet were incredibly dirty. I laughed at myself
sitting there on the cement. I had just taken a shower
earlier today and here I was sitting in the dirt, running
around the dusty streets bare foot. I shook my head and
crossed the street without waiting anymore for the go
ahead from the shining walk signal.

------
"God grant me distraction."
-Zampano



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The following comments are for "Explore for the Sake of the Journey (p.1)"
by Darkshine Raven

pincher?
DS this got more than one chuckle out of me. It makes me wonder where you live that you think up such delightful stuff. Just one question - what's a pincher?

( Posted by: Penelope [Member] On: October 6, 2003 )

Pincer...
"Pincher" or Pincer bug/ beetle. Either or works fine. They have big pinchers/ pincers on their heads and when you get pinched it hurts...*ouch* I have had that happen many times. Anyway, loved the story. Funny yet (realistic?). Does not matter, it was still good! Part of something bigger I presume?*points to the title*

( Posted by: Rage2Fury [Member] On: October 6, 2003 )

clarity
Ha, Penelope I live in my imagination because this cow town I informally call home offers no such inspiration! =D

Thank you for your comment, there will be more of these to come. And sorry for the unclear word...when I said "pincher" I was referring to one of those sharp little pieces that break off of plants. I don't know the *real* word for them...

( Posted by: Darkshine Raven [Member] On: October 6, 2003 )

Pricklies?
I call them "pricks" of all the names in the world. I have never heard them called pinchers, but I guess it works. I realize now that you would know if you had a Pincer bug/beetle stuck in you foot. Don't mind that other comment it was the first thing that came to mind!

( Posted by: Rage2Fury [Member] On: October 6, 2003 )

part one
Yeah, Steven...this is indeed part of something bigger. A series about...exploring an area that seems real boring. Thoughts related to it, ect...I don't know where it's going really. =D

( Posted by: Darkshine Raven [Member] On: October 6, 2003 )

Keep on truckin'
You'll figure it out... keep on truckin' through it. I have never read a story about something boring. It might be exciting. Can't wait for the rest then!

( Posted by: Rage2Fury [Member] On: October 6, 2003 )

pricks?
Well DS, I usually call them thorns or thistles depending on the plant. Except for devil's club and I call them spikes. I never call them pricks. I know what a prick is. :-)

( Posted by: Penelope [Member] On: October 6, 2003 )

complete clarity
They're called "thorns". Heh, I'm glad I finally got that figured out. I knew I knew the word, I just couldn't get my finger on it! =D

( Posted by: Darkshine Raven [Member] On: October 6, 2003 )

*wink*
Haha, awesome Penelope!

( Posted by: Darkshine Raven [Member] On: October 6, 2003 )

ouch
thorns hurt. life kills like, kills life kills, life kills.

*dances around a bit*

Very cool, as usual.

( Posted by: gaschamberblues [Member] On: October 8, 2003 )

thanks
Thank you for your kinda words gaschmaber. I'm glad my writingis usually very cool. =D I hope you enjoy the rest of these as much as the original...no more thorns, I promise. =D

( Posted by: Darkshine Raven [Member] On: October 9, 2003 )





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