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Control “P” is the key, unlocking visions of wondrous clarity; incisions which retrain my brain to think suburban jungle.

I imagine myself immersed in that savage liquid wonderland, full of pristine behinds shaking to the newest techno beat, and the stomping of feet, and delicious body heat.

But the mixes and mayhem that pound, and resound, with power and fury are silenced, one by one with lawsuits and violence, by big-brother RIAA and what their lawyers say.

Glowsticks dulling, while I sit mulling, and files are crawling inside the aisles of computer’s metal skull. Lurching and searching for some way to bring me down; I frown.

I leave my second skin, stop the music; the world wears thin. This whole idea, these sublime near-rhymes, they come together into an almost-was poem.

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The following comments are for "crashing down upon me like a wave"
by Washer

Interesting poem Washer, I liked the imagery especially, but I have no clue what you are talking about! =D Some of the rhymnes here are a bit forced, but I liked the layout you used. I've got a bit of a mixed opinion I suppose. It'd be great...if I could get around the confusion and some of the weaker rhymnes. This line made me laugh:

"pristine behinds shaking to the newest techno beat"

Classic. =D

( Posted by: Darkshine Raven [Member] On: October 6, 2003 )

Rcallaci & Raven
"and the stomping of feet . . . "
Yeah, not my finest moment. I went a little crazy with those.

I know if it's a good poem I shouldn't have to explain it, but I'm going to anyway, which says something about the quality.

1st stanza: I press ctrl + P, which starts windows media player playing a song. The music seeps into my skull.
2nd stanza: I imagine that I'm listening to the music inside a warehouse rave or nightclub.
3rd stanza: The free music period is coming to an end, as a lobbying group called the RIAA is suing anyone and anything.
4th stanza: There's probably some sort of program digging through my computer, looking for my IP information, etc., to use in court.
5th stanza: It's a poem.

Hope that helped Darkshine.

( Posted by: Washer [Member] On: October 6, 2003 )

I did kinda get the feeling you were addressing music and it's effect on you. I like the musical feel to it, by the way. And don't worry about the "free music period" it's totally not ending. RIAA can't sue everyone in the USA. They're just gonna have to adapt. =D

( Posted by: Darkshine Raven [Member] On: October 6, 2003 )

Control "P"
Love it... it did remind me of rap in more ways than one... *thinks out loud* Some how you went around a subject, but still came back to computers. I will try that... Maybe I have done it before and I didn't even know. Nice piece of writing!

( Posted by: Rage2Fury [Member] On: October 6, 2003 )

Power.... the music in the streets!

Let it roar. Ctrl+P forever. Great piece, stranger. 9/10

( Posted by: gaschamberblues [Member] On: October 7, 2003 )

You're busted!
Just kidding. I like this piece and think the 2nd stanza is perfect. Lots of other good stuff, too.

On the free music subject, that's a tough one. I don't like the big music conglomerates but I do feel for the musicians, especially jazz musicians, who seem to take a screwing from all sides.

( Posted by: gomarsoap [Member] On: October 7, 2003 )

ctrl 'p'
You know, I got the rave bit, but (call me windows scum) I took 'ctrl p' to be a print command.

( Posted by: lu [Member] On: October 7, 2003 )

@gomar - It's not just jazz. Every form of non-popular music takes it up the ass. I could name death and black metal, grindcore, doom, psy-trance to name a few. Then again, so-call respect or popularlity can finallt lead to ruin, so I think it's better this way.

( Posted by: gaschamberblues [Member] On: October 7, 2003 )

Pen: Thanks. You rule.
Rage: I don't know if you have, I don't read too much poetry. But it's not too tricky. Just try to write something concise, and then stray from there.
gaschamber: Thanks.
gomar: Thanks. And yeah, as they say, music; it's good stuff. Personally, I'm more of a borrower though.
lu: Don't worry, we can't all be perfect. Thinking ctrl + p was a print command, on a website dedicated to writing? What were you thinking?

Thanks everyone.

( Posted by: Washer [Member] On: October 8, 2003 )

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