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The alarm clock shrilled its heinous sound
Which shattered my peaceful sleep.
My head, it ached and began to pound.
I fair began to weep.

My muscles clenched, my breath rasped in my throat
My eyes afire; they fairly bulged
"I'll fix you, O demon clock," I began to gloat

I snatched my shoe and fair did pound
On the clock which offended me
It kept on ticking with a most determined sound.
My weakened mind was filled with glee.

The blows they fell with vigor strong
Til pieces filled the air.
I bowed my head, I had done wrong.
I'd murdered my clock. Could that be fair?





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The following comments are for "Working Girl Blues 2"
by witchy woman

Inspirational
I haven't been this inspired all day -- and it's half over! I felt your pain, your irritation, your fury in each heavy word, Witchy. I wanted to kill that alarm clock too!

We all want to kill it, all of us fair folk who read this blessed verse. We all do. So don't be ashamed or guilty. Know that thousands of irritated Westerners are waiting to take your place, inspired by your example.

Shoes in hands . . .

( Posted by: Viper9 [Member] On: October 5, 2003 )

For you, Viper
You asked for a murder with my first wretched version so, just for you, my truest inspiration - I only wish I could have worked in a "munkey".

( Posted by: witchy woman [Member] On: October 5, 2003 )

When?
Are you going to do another write?
I liked this and want to see more...

Best wishes...Mouse...write, write, write.

( Posted by: raejon [Member] On: May 16, 2004 )





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