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Hiding Place
May 8th, 2002

Come out wherever you are
I know where you've been hiding
You're in the dark corner of my mind
Waiting to jump out at me

You whisper things to remind me
Of the person i was
The person i really am
And the person i could be

All i want to hear is your lips moving
They quiver at the slightest sound
You're scared because i know
How to be someone else

You say things to protect me
Of the person you were
The person you really are
And the person you could be


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The following comments are for "Hiding Place"
by eyescovered

stronger
I think this is one of your better poems because it has a strong theme.

The second line of the last stanza struck me as awkward.

( Posted by: gomarsoap [Member] On: October 26, 2003 )

eyescovered
This poem is more than words on a page. It is a childrens nursery rhyme. It skips across the page like an infant.

Handshake

( Posted by: Handshake [Member] On: December 23, 2003 )





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