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Over Us
May 10th, 2003

You left me for a better chance
And left me in the dust
You thought, decided and took your stance
And totally betrayed my trust

I've learned to live without you
Now that you've been gone
I bet you thought i'd miss you
But you were very wrong

Things didn't work out for you
And now you're full of regret
All of which that has been overdue
Now watch how easily i forget

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The following comments are for "Over Us"
by eyescovered

Doe-doe-doe-doe - Sha-la-la.
This poem would make great lyrics for a Doo-Wop song. Perhaps by a group called, "The Broken Hearts." Dug it.

P.S.: Visited the site. You cats keep it up - it can only get better.

( Posted by: gomarsoap [Member] On: October 4, 2003 )

poetry
that was good
8/10
i hope who you wrote it about gets to read it

( Posted by: suez-q [Member] On: October 12, 2003 )

Nice.
I like this one. I think it's the best I've read of yours.

( Posted by: Storyteller [Member] On: November 12, 2003 )





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