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40watt bulb
suspended
by it's cord
in the corner

a single light
and I
separated only
by a red shower screen

naked wet
and bathed
in a red glow.
Getting clean.

We tore a toilet out
and put
the shower here
because
the plumbing
meant we could.
I can't see.

On the other side
traffic
three floors
below

there's a window
to the back of me
we couldn't shut

Hoping that
the water
would stay
hot

(the
good old days
before that
blew up)

so fucking what?

------
-Lu


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The following comments are for "red door"
by Lu

clarity
I like the clarity and mood of the poem. Using the brevity of words to say the most.

( Posted by: loblolly [Member] On: October 3, 2003 )

Clean
Nice raw poem with very attractive clean form, like modern art. Has the feel of true experience. Suggests different scenarios to me: could be from growing up poor folks; could be squatters fixing a place to live in a semi-abandoned building; etc.

I really liked the 3rd stanza.

( Posted by: gomarsoap [Member] On: October 4, 2003 )





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