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Is it ever really as simple as they say
formulaic to an extreme
only contemplated by mathmeticians
other than some out there shit
like chaos theory
and whoa, look, I'm super string type shit
I doubt it but the advice
keeps pouring in
"all you have to do is blah blah blah"
"I've been there and I ..."
"Well, you will never survive this unles you (fill in the blank)"
and I keep wondering if I even ever asked for their musings
I'm sure I didn't
and they can tell it to their therapists
which they ALWAYS advise me I need...
I have three words for them
play with that kids and don't choke

don't worry, it's just God speaking...

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The following comments are for "and then simple wasn't"
by 42 suicidal mules

I liked the words you used in this piece and the strong sense of voice I got from it. I felt like I was talking to one of my friends from downtown. A guy all rough around the edges. Nice job. You did however spell "unless" wrong. =D

( Posted by: Darkshine Raven [Member] On: October 5, 2003 )

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