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she finds herself still waiting
for what hasn't happened yet
she's thumbing through her memories
and picking out regret
she finds her thoughts still wander
when she finds time to think
and the dirty laundry's piling
like the dishes in the sink

she finds her head's still aching
as she dreams of other places
the old familiar comfort
of unfamiliar faces
she finds herself still trying
while crying once again
to reconcile what is
with what could and should have been

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The following comments are for "she finds herself"
by DL Scott

rhyme and punctuation
I really liked the flow and rhymes in this piece! I also enjoyed the blatant disregard for grammer without making it completely incomprehensible. Keep it up. =D

( Posted by: Darkshine Raven [Member] On: October 2, 2003 )

Should've, could've, would've. Pretty good poem. Real tight & clean. No garbage.

( Posted by: gomarsoap [Member] On: October 2, 2003 )

Very good.
I like this. I agree with the comments already made.

( Posted by: Storyteller [Member] On: November 13, 2003 )

old familiar comfort
best words in the poem are: "old familiar comfort
of unfamiliar faces"

reveals and conceals at the same one mystery. that's what a poem is about, teases your memory.

( Posted by: webguy [Member] On: March 28, 2004 )

I do like this piece of yours. It has rythm and can describe what many feel in their personal lives. I also like how you used words to mean another if you understand what I mean, like when you said, "and the dirty laundry's piling
like the dishes in the sink." Very good poem, I'd give it a 8/10.

( Posted by: zacharu [Member] On: June 19, 2004 )

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