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It was a day so black and drear
The skies opened and drenched the earth
It never seemed to clear.
The world shuddered as in death.

The darkening pall stretched o'er the land
An chilling silence screamed into the heavy skies.
The stench of disquiet reached its gnarly hand
Into the growing dread and fear.

Fluttering wings, as hideous moths, buffeted my door.
The wail of silent voices rings my quivering brain.
My sanity gone; I can take no more.
I open the door.

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The following comments are for "The Lost Souls"
by the demure 1

I loved this one, demure. The imagery and sense of desperation/resignation (if that's possible) are so strong. Good job!

( Posted by: xlnt_1 [Member] On: October 1, 2003 )

Last night I watched Wes Craven's They. Man, did this poem remind me of that movie. Creepy little tentacled things . . .

( Posted by: viper9 [Member] On: October 1, 2003 )

Lost Souls
~Demure 1~
This is Great!!! I loved every line
from the first to the last
keep em' comin



( Posted by: JEANNIE45 [Member] On: October 2, 2003 )

I never have seen any of Craven's stuff but Viper's description of creepy tentacled things reminds me of some really bad dates!

( Posted by: the demure 1 [Member] On: October 2, 2003 )

Man . . .
What's with all the dark poetry on this site? Man, it's so depressing!

Anyway, I liked this poem anyway. I can't say it made my heart sing, but my stomach rumbled. I'll settle for sloppy seconds if it's the only offering!

(That sounds really insulting -- really, that's not how I meant it! I liked the poem. So why don't I just delete that sentence instead of risking offense? Not sure. I like the sound of it.)


( Posted by: Boy Howdy [Member] On: October 8, 2003 )

To exit
What happaned after the door opened? Did you go? Dark, clear, fine.

( Posted by: gaschamberblues [Member] On: October 8, 2003 )

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