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I want to scream, banging my head
against the invisible walls surrounding me,
shielding you,
and tell you it was all a mistake,
and would you ever look back?
Perhaps too much time has transpired
and weíve all become something else entirely,
but it didnít seem that way to me,
watching you through the invisible nodes
connecting our fingertips.
Do the products from the pharmacy heal your pain?
Does the dragon breath burn away your tears?
Or was I worth an at all?
Itís a liquidless rain falling from the strata.
Itís molten emotion
and crystallised pain
and I canít feel them as they burn
my skin and
freeze it again.
If youíre lucky,
you still can.

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The following comments are for "Molten Emotion"
by Reiko Korin

Molten Emotions
This poem needs work. I don't care for the first half. Don't care for words like "transpire." The second half picked up some steam but the whole thing can be better written.

( Posted by: gomarsoap [Member] On: September 28, 2003 )

I liked this to tell you the truth. The title together with the poem made me think of how our emotions sometimes flow and burn within, like molten rock beneath our skin! 7/10!

( Posted by: Rage2Fury [Member] On: September 28, 2003 )

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