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When in the end it comes to you,
and you feel it there again,
remember first your anguish,
remember first your pain,
for they were right beside you,
and them bieng there, what did YOU gain?

did they whisper in your ear,
as you wrought another shame,
commiting acts of ignorance,
though you know this little game,
do you feel any better,
now things won't ever be the same?

and when it comes around to you,
will you see that, then at least?
you have built what you have been,
and create what self then sees,
and sink deeper in the pit,
of could have done and been?

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The following comments are for "tell an old tale...."
by wally 5

I definately liked this piece. The point you are making here is right on as well. A very good comment about a problem I believe we all suffer from. Bravo. =D

( Posted by: Darkshine Raven [Member] On: September 26, 2003 )

Bloody good
A bloody good poem that makes a good point without the use of a soapbox. Excellent work, Sir Wally!

( Posted by: Boy Howdy [Member] On: September 26, 2003 )

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