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Streaks peer between the twinkling stars
Widening and twistng as narrow ribbons
Glowing in rosy pink and sea green hues.
The ribbons begin their sedate waltz soon to be abandoned as excitement grows.
Faster and faster as colors dance a wild, abandoned and age old Tarantella; ebbing and flowing
Claiming more and more of the winter sky until the sky capitulates
allowing Aurora its full glory.

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The following comments are for "Aurora"
by The demure 1

Simply grand
A grand poem, dear demure. A couple of minor little errors (typos?), but I don't care. It paints a picture in mind, abstract at first, all colours and forms through metaphor, then movement -- and finally, it comes into brilliant focus.

( Posted by: Viper9 [Member] On: September 23, 2003 )

Really Nice
YOu must have seen the Northern Lights at some point because you have drawn us a gorgeous picture of a northern sky at night. This is really well done.

( Posted by: witchy woman [Member] On: September 24, 2003 )

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