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Little Gems II


I.
She looks like her father
With great big blue eyes
In the end
Her beautiful swanlike neck
Squeezed tight by the garrote
Lovely blue irises bordered by
Bursting capillaries, tiny bombs.

II.
Little one
Where was your beauty
Hidden under your false face
The paints of a harlot
Overshadowing what’s no longer yours
What did you last see...?
Perhaps a trusted face
Manning murderous hands…
No one will ever know.

III.

Even in the dark
Familiar eyes were
Watching you.
In the dark, far away
Far below the glaring ballroom lights
Lost in that sea of eyes
Following your every move
Across that brightly lit stage.

IV.

You knew no better
Than to listen and do
As you were told—
Tiny angel
Looking away from that prized trophy
Knowing somehow, you were someone else’s
Little trophy, their little whore….


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N.E.


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The following comments are for "Little Gems II"
by Nicquerica

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I always felt Little Gems was a really great poem years ago, and it's sequel is even better. Keep up the good writing---VJ

( Posted by: Vember Judgement [Member] On: September 23, 2003 )

Good imagery
very vivid and gruesome pictures are conjured in my mind's eyes, esp. 1st verse.
Hugs
Paul the Ogg

( Posted by: ogg [Member] On: September 23, 2003 )

Thanks Ogg, for the commentary...
I'm glad you liked my poem!!! I just wish I had the time to post my poems and stuff more often, you know? :)

( Posted by: Nicquerica [Member] On: September 23, 2003 )

Yeah
Know xactly what you mean. I just started a new job, after two months out of work. Today's a rare day off - but I'm looking forward to working again. I'll be posting, when I can, but it won't be as much, or so often.
Hugs
Paul the Working-Class Ogg

( Posted by: ogg [Member] On: September 24, 2003 )





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