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Elm and Oak long gone these days,
I search for self now lost,
wandering through soul so bare,
ignoring price and cost...

Blinded by my wretched self,
afriad to see the light,
THE TRICK is lost on me i fear,
through my own thickening fright.

I look too deep into the void,
upon this sea we're tossed
many refuse to see the truth,
we don't know WE'RE NOT LOST.

and as for void it's true also,
that it does not exist,
we just assume it's always there
as our beliefs we twist,

yes i think i'll do fine one day,
when i see truth as is,
time and loss is fine my friends,
but all does not exist....


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The following comments are for "time....... and loss.......and loss was a poem, my slip up."
by wally 5

This is different
I think your work is getting so much deeper and more meaningful, Wally. I like the line about beliefs being twisted - sounds like the lively debate that's been on site the last few days! Keep this stuff coming!!!

( Posted by: witchy woman [Member] On: September 23, 2003 )

twist
Wally, I really like this piece. The capitals you used was a good way to draw attention to your point, though in a different medium I would suggest using italics. Anyways, I really appreciated what this piece had to say. Keep it up! =D

( Posted by: Darkshine Raven [Member] On: September 23, 2003 )

thanks
thanks for the comment...I am new to this posting stuff. is there a way to put italics on? I don't see that button anywhere...
and I don't actually have any writing software but word pad...now I'll just sit back and watch all the writers cringe hee hee.

( Posted by: Wally 5 [Member] On: September 23, 2003 )

Twisty fun
A fun poem. I don't quite connect with the first stanza, but by the end I'm lost in reflection and that's the point, right? I hear Nietzsche and Buddha in your work.

( Posted by: Viper9 [Member] On: September 23, 2003 )

no italics
I'm almost positive there's no way to put italics on here wally. I mean if you were submitting it or something. If you wanted it to look professional that is.

( Posted by: Darkshine Raven [Member] On: September 23, 2003 )

italics
There are a couple of formatting tags you *can* use at the moment. I'll add more later as well as full formatting documentation.

Italics = Word
Bold = Word

Word being the word or words you want to effect. This formatting does not apply to comments yet.

( Posted by: chrispian [Admin] On: September 23, 2003 )

ah ha!
I was wondering about using formatting tags! Thanks. =D

( Posted by: Darkshine Raven [Member] On: September 24, 2003 )

thank you
Ireally appreciate the comments and the ways of using italics...sometimes i don't know how or what needs more emphasis though...but thats why we keep trying....

( Posted by: Wally 5 [Member] On: September 24, 2003 )

comments
No problem Wally! =D You're on the right track, just keep trying. You'll get it.

( Posted by: Darkshine Raven [Member] On: September 24, 2003 )





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