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Barely There
By:
David


Iím a reflection of a shadow
And even that is cast by doubt
As a reflection of a shadow, one may never be too sure

Iím a reflection of a shadow
Mirrored between truth and lies
Never knowing how to choose, where the path of justice lies

A reflection of a shadow
Barely there, itís never seen
A reflection of a shadow
Is a shadow cast by lies


------
When the winds of the west blow, it is called Farror, for he is the god of all wind.


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by Farror

over broken rhyme scheme
Farror~

You have quite a few really good lines in this piece but the on-again off-again nature of your rhyme scheme really throws me off. I think if you would stick to one or the other it would greatly improve the poem, especially in one as short as this.

Bart

( Posted by: Bartleby [Member] On: February 11, 2004 )





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