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The teacher asked me why I never talk in class.
"So bright a student, yet you never try,
you, my child, have nothing to hide. Speak up!"

Yet I looked her in the eye and shook my sorry head.
"I feel that I have less to offer,
than others have to teach. Therefore I am silent."

She seemed fully disappointed and so I was moved to share.
I explained the way I felt.
"Others ask hundreds of questions, and never listen.
They only feed their personal desires.
Closed ears, however, won't let in any lessons,
whether solicited or not."

Watching me for a moment, she pondered what I said.
"You are brighter than I thought," said she.

And I listened, hoping I could learn from her ability
to let her defenses down.
How much I learned that day!

------
"God grant me distraction."
-Zampano


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The following comments are for "A Subtle Lesson Learned"
by Darkshine Raven

Turnabout
Is fair play. It's pretty tricky to comment on flash fiction, because there's so little material. But here I go.

I liked the point of this story.

What's with the margins? Was this set up as a piece of poetry, which also works in story form?

Do you like those blueberry turnover things they used to serve you at school lunches?

( Posted by: Washer [Member] On: September 18, 2003 )

poetry gone mad
Yeah Washer it was a poem, but I couldn't make it work so I just left the margins as they were. I liked the way it kinda put more emphasis on what each person said though, so I think it's alright it the end...

And I loved blueberry turnovers back in the day. Great stuff.

Thanks for the feedback. =D

( Posted by: Darkshine Raven [Member] On: September 19, 2003 )





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