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Torches burn around the room,
Unburdening deadly gloom.
Stone walls echo fruitless calls,
The demon grinds his jaws.
In shadows, young and old,
Huddle from the cold.
From gaping holes,
Blood eternally flows.
In the room of restless souls.

In the centre of the room,
Victims denied a tomb.
Writhing beneath their captors,
Nothing else matters:
Pleading for a friend,
They cry for the pain to end.
From gaping holes,
Blood eternally flows.
In the room of restless souls.

To the far of the room,
Lined with bars, three windows loom.
Too high for those to see,
A promised land, open and free.
If only they knew
The world removed from view.
From gaping holes,
Blood eternally flows.
In the room of restless souls.

Living and dead possess the room,
Shackled by their doom.
No night and no day,
They are confined to stay.
In the room of restless souls.
Until the walls are broken,
To a world forsaken,
There will always be the gaping holes,
Where the blood eternally flows,
In the room of restless souls.


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The following comments are for "The Room Of Restless Souls"
by Steve Murphy

This is good!
This sounds like either hell or an early asylum! It's chilling in the feeling of hopelessness and misery. You offer them hope but just out of reach - it sounds like hell!! This is interesting, provoking and disturbing - great job!

( Posted by: the demure 1 [Member] On: September 17, 2003 )

Disturbing...
Cheers, that was the atmos I was trying to create. The poem was written to describe the feelings of a person who has lost someone close to them in tradgic circumstances. There seems no hope. Faith's just a joke.
Trying to think of happier times is hard when a terrible act is forever associated with them.

( Posted by: Steve Murphy [Member] On: September 17, 2003 )





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