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The dust whirls across the street
stinging the face of the weary young mother
hanging out diapers while toddlers cling to her aching legs
she straightens her aching back and faces the swinging screen door as flies buzz lazily in and out
As despair grows.

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The following comments are for "the trailer park"
by witchy woman

Eh? Que? I'm confused . . .

( Posted by: Viper9 [Member] On: September 18, 2003 )

HMMM Viper
Something has stumped the Viper - no monkeys or Bopping!! It should sound hideous - poverty is hideous and that's all that I was intending to show.

( Posted by: witchy woman [Member] On: September 19, 2003 )

Captures a moment well. I felt like this when my personal life was in shambles, and I was made as heck at everyone. Despair sums it up very well. Good.

( Posted by: Captainkeyboard [Member] On: March 19, 2004 )

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