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He appears without sadness in the heart of darkness.
Skull and bones, white and black,
'I'll carry you on my back.'
A sword in the right hand, bread in the left hand.
He dances in the sand.

Needles and pins in every limb, you walk to him.
Feeling numb, to the beat of a drum,
You almost succumb.
But at every turn, every stomach churn,
You know, you'll have the chance to learn.

The final temptation, the scourge of every nation!
Quivering, unkneeling, standing tall
You watch the dust cloud fall.
Now the prints are yours! No rota chores!
Your spirit soars!

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The following comments are for "Steadfast"
by Steve Murphy

Sold your soul?
Sounds like selling your soul to the "devil" is as sweet as the fruit of the sacred tree! good piece!


( Posted by: scryer [Member] On: September 16, 2003 )

This was scary! You raised goosebumps! This was a really visual piece of work which with my vivid imagination really works well. I wanted to paint what I saw. Good work!

( Posted by: witchy woman [Member] On: September 16, 2003 )

Good work. I really liked this a lot. No goosebumps for me, but I know it was good. I love this kidna stuff. It is almost a story. As said before, I felt like painting what I saw. Grand Indeed. Rota?

( Posted by: Rage2Fury [Member] On: September 20, 2003 )

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