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His eyes flicker like sparks from a flame. They devour me with greedy tenticles. He smiles wide like a snake, or like a spider. There is something ablaze inside of him, and like all other fires, it reaches out to take a hold of any carbon substance it can. And reach out he does indeed. He sucessfully tames me with a triumphant moan. I brace myself against the impending backdraft. Suddenly I am broken down and apart admist the heated passion of his weighty kisses. I feel a knot inside my stomach, the fire has entered my body now. So why is it, I wonder, that I feel so cold?

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"God grant me distraction."
-Zampano


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The following comments are for "Hephaestus II (PG-13)"
by Darkshine Raven

agree
I am in agreement with you on this Pene. I think maybe I should be a bit more elusive with this piece.

( Posted by: Darkshine Raven [Member] On: September 13, 2003 )





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