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Brief Encounter

He runs through the doors, stopping in front of me
Our eyes meet
We smile, its kind of apologetic
The soft lighting separates us from the darkness surrounding us
We slowly move together, just slightly swaying to the rhythm, perfectly timed
His hand touches mine, almost plays with my fingertips
His smile apologises again
I can feel the earth moving under my feet
I smile at the thought, turning my face from him
He moves closer
Weíre cheek to chin, and we dare not look at each other
The touch, the breath, that smell of after shaveÖitís too much
Unable to move away from him, I dare not look
My heart is beating so loud, I think he can hear it
Thud, thud, thud,
The space between us feels as though itís tightening even further
Suffocating me
I feel as though Iím breathing through him
As if the music has reached a crescendo, he moves with a sudden push
Iím crushed against his chest
I look up
His eyes wide, look straight through me
One second suddenly feels like a lifetime
His mouth opens to say something? Maybe?
I donít know because my heartís just stopped and Iím dead
Heís suddenly pushed away from me,
My earring catches in his jumper
He untangles it and as he is about to put it in my hand he is pushed out of the doors
The doors slide shut
I stand there looking through the window
Heís standing there holding my earring in his hand.
He looks at it, at me and then smiles
I smile; itís not apologetic
The platform starts moving away from me
We look until we canít anymore
I sit down next to a woman eating something greasy with pickles in a greaseproof noisy paper
Guiltily I reach in to my bag and pull out a book
But I dare not read it
Cixous will have to wait


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