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"It's a long way down,"
You said as you looked into the pit.
"I know," I smiled back,
Thinking of how much I'd like to push you down it.

There was nothing between you and me
To prevent it from happening.
Just one simple shove, a trip,
And it would all be over.

From your persepective, it was a deep hole,
But for me, it was the end to all my worries.
As I readied to send you down into oblivion,
You jumped and took me with you.

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The following comments are for "The pit"
by Xlnt_1

abandon ship!
I enjoyed this, it reminded me how important it is to get off a sinking ship as soon as the life boat hit the water, lest you go down with it!


It is a lesson worth learning!

( Posted by: scryer [Member] On: September 16, 2003 )

read my mind
Have you ever been standing next to someone, or talking to someone, and you think, "Holy crap, I could gouge your eyes out before you knew what was happening" or "it would be so easy to push you into this here traffic"? And then you feel horrible for even thinking that? Happens to me all the time. That's what this poem brought to mind, superficially.

On a deeper level, I enjoyed that sense of just missing an opportunity, and the feeling of near-escapes and victimization at the hands of an emotional black hole (hey, we all know a few).

Loved it.

( Posted by: Boy Howdy [Member] On: September 17, 2003 )

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