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I wish you'd been there.

Oh, the light! You should have seen it! The blinding, radiant, fulfilling light. It was beautiful. You should have seen it.

But you couldn't. You weren't there. For me. When I needed you. I have never needed you more than then. You let me down. Don't worry, I forgive you.

I pray you're okay. I hope you got out in time. You should have been there, with me, but I'm glad you're all right. You're important to me. Remember that. Remember me.

The light was so pretty. It was the most beautiful thing I had ever seen. It was so slow and peaceful. I shut my eyes - I was at peace with myself. You should have seen me. I didn't panic at all.

Now, I float, buoyant in my catatonic state. I think of you always. I wish you'd come back to me. I need someone to hug. To feel safe around. To live with me in the light.

It was indescribable. You should have seen it. It was there, all around me. Through me. Tangible light. Soft. Like your skin. You should have been there. With me.

I wish you'd been there.

But then, you would have died in the explosion too...


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by False Dawn

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