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As I sit, gazing uncertainly,
The walls begin to crumble,
Thus falling down upon me.

People murmur, and mother's stare,
All this discrimination,
is almost too much for me to bear.

Unwanted, unseen, unheard of, I am,
All due to one little choice,
Woman, over man.

I cannot help the way I feel,
You shall not waver my decisions,
It must be hard to admit this is real.

You can shun, point, and sneer,
YSuch mindless gestures deserve no thought,
Am I making myself clear?

To hope, to wish, to wonder,
Forceful actions move no further,
I cannot help but be you're only failure.

-Raven

------
Fate holds on tight
As we stumble on through life

-K.J. Hackett


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The following comments are for "Your only failure."
by xraven91x

interesting...
I liked this poem. The rythmn staggered a bit towards the middle, but overal I liked the feel of it. And...I don't know if this is personal or not, but regardless keep in mind you are never alone, seriously. One question...is this directed at the speaker's parents?

( Posted by: Darkshine Raven [Member] On: September 12, 2003 )

Thanks.
Thank you for your comment, and the critique, and questions are extremly wanted! I know it staggers a bit, but I was going more for the meaning behind it, than the actual rhythm. Yes, this is to my parents, concerning my sexuality, and how no matter what, because of such, I will always be deemed a failure. -Their failure. But thanks for the critique.

-Raven

( Posted by: xraven91x [Member] On: September 12, 2003 )

parents
I'm sorry to hear your parents don't appreciate your feelings Raven. You seem like a strong girl and that's good. Don't let them get ya down.

( Posted by: Darkshine Raven [Member] On: September 12, 2003 )





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