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I love the way you pout,
I love the way you sing,
I love the way you break me down,
I love the pain you bring.

I love the way you laugh out loud,
I love the way you smile,
I love the way you scowl at me,
I love the way you doubt.

I love each and every little thing,
that brings me close to you,
But most of all I love the way,
You'll never love me too.

-Raven

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Fate holds on tight
As we stumble on through life

-K.J. Hackett


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The following comments are for "I love the way"
by xraven91x

how do ppl do it?
i mean, i cant for my life have a poem run in a fluid flow like your poem! i loved that way i could just read it, and have like a chant in my haed of how it went. the ending is so bitter sweet-and does a good job of ending it-nice.

( Posted by: soulblade [Member] On: September 11, 2003 )

Thanks!
That is what I was going for, Mantra. It is a sort of battle cry from a relationship that ended over differences and false hope.

Thank you, Soulblade, for your comment. Things that flow are easy, when you have a good idea of what it is you're trying to express.

-Raven

( Posted by: xraven91x [Member] On: September 11, 2003 )

Thank you!
Thank you very much. I took your advice and read your piece, and they are quite similar. I enjoyed your overall tone, and your critique. Thank you.

Raven

( Posted by: xraven91x [Member] On: September 14, 2003 )

Nice Poem
I liked your poem very much. It was a very clear expression of the way that some people (obviously you, and I as well) czn sometimes feel. I always like it when I can connect to a poem, too, so kudos on making it general but personal. Nice job!

( Posted by: vegibrgr [Member] On: November 17, 2003 )





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