Breath Me
by chop_n_change (Member) - published: September 3, 2003
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Category - Poetry
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She is the shape of beauty -
an ice-cold waterfall of life
wandering in the snow.
She walks by my side,
arm around me,
hugs me safe in the night.

We walk to our own rhythm -
a love-drunk, slow-motion cha-cha.
She stops me,
faces me,
presses against my body in androgynous togetherness
of big coats, soft scarves and hot breath.

This is the girl who stops me dead
with her glacier eyes,
halts my pulse with her hot body
and lets me die,
then breathes me back to life.

I stand her in a random garden of suburbia,
a fantasy of living ice sculpture in the falling feathers of snow.
A haze of soft blue night-time bounces from snowflake,
to snowflake, to her,
and stops -
even the midnight moonlight loves her.

This girl is like the falling snow, but softer,
except that when she falls onto my hand,
i melt,
not her.

She is with me
and i'm alive.
Between her kisses
she breathes me life.

I want nothing but her.

(for Kara)

------
first draft with your heart, second with your head.

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The following comments are for "Breath Me"
by chop_n_change

Kara
Kara is a lucky girl...beautiful work of art, dreamy love, the heat of passion and urgency shine in this poem.

( Posted by: scryer [Member] On: September 4, 2003 )

Yabba dabba
who is this Kara? To have inspired so much heart-stopping beauty and sheer radiance - WOW!
Rock n bark, CNC, - good stuff.
Best
Paul the Ogg

( Posted by: ogg [Member] On: September 4, 2003 )

who is she?
she the kind of girl you wanna wrap in a thousand blankets and fall asleep with.

she's the kind of girl you'd give up sex for, except she's now the only girl in the world who makes you want it.

although kara herself is as real as she could be, and as much mine as the poem suggests, the scene depicted above is entirely fictional. here's hoping she's still with me at christmas so it can become real.

i plan on keeping her in a drawer forever, where no-one can take her off me.

thankyou for your very nice comments.
chris.

( Posted by: chop_n_change [Member] On: September 4, 2003 )

all comments
please don't hesitate to comment on this.

anything at all, whether something you like or something you would like me to change or that didn't work for you.

i can't get better if you don't tell me how.

doesn't matter who you are.

including a certain tigress, who i would appreciate help from in my quest to get better.

*cheesy grin here!*

chop chop!

( Posted by: chop_n_change [Member] On: September 4, 2003 )

ill say this...
what i liked about this poem, not only does it have passion, but you keep the image of winter through out the whole poem! never did it fade or came back, then fade. it continued on, love can bring out the poet in us cant it?

( Posted by: soulblade [Member] On: September 4, 2003 )

Breath Me
Chop~N~Change:
It's hard to believe you just started posting your work here at Lit.Org, and amazingly, your work is so Grand. I love your poems,such creative.

Blesings

{{{Jeanie}}}

( Posted by: JEANNIE45 [Member] On: September 8, 2003 )

Well . . .
Jonpenny wrote, "Breath Me rocks!" So, you know I had to hit up your profile and look for this piece.

It's sexy as hell.

Although I DO have to admit when I read this line inititially:

Between her kisses
she breathes me life.

I THOUGHT it read

Between her KNEES
she breathes me life.

And I had to stop and say, "whoa!"

My second read-through, I realized me error!

I'n glad you're back around these parts again! Since you are a poet, perhaps you'll not only post more of your own work, but roll up your sleeves and help the other poets improve theirs.

Ochani

( Posted by: OchaniLele [Member] On: June 5, 2009 )

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