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Drifting clouds float
Over the ocean profound and blue
And the mocking cry of sea birds fill the air

Neath the waters dark and deep
Lie gloomy creatures, in the ocean somber and cold
And each and every one of them is death and destruction silent yet bold

Careless and free, the wonderful sea
Is two faced two sided and split between light and dark


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When the winds of the west blow, it is called Farror, for he is the god of all wind.


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The following comments are for "The Two Sides Of The Ocean"
by Farror

very calm
i think the fact that this poem is based on the ocean, it has a very placid feeling to it (i was waiting to use that word :) but i mean it. and i like the way you compared the ocean-both whats under and whats above. the calm and the dangerous...

( Posted by: soulblade [Member] On: September 6, 2003 )

I like It!
Hey this is good. I found one spelling error *Neath* should be Beneath, but nothing major...

( Posted by: Rage2Fury [Member] On: September 17, 2003 )

less isn't always more
Farror~

I would suggest that you expound on the ideas you express here in a little more detail. I'd also avoid chiched alliterations like dark and deep, it makes any well read reader think of poets far greater than those we find here at Lit. Robert Frost to be specific. This has potential just needs some sprucing up and a thesuarus could do wonders for you.

Just my two yen~

Bart

( Posted by: Bartleby [Member] On: February 11, 2004 )

Neath?
Beneath, surely? Unless you mean a place in South Wales :)

I have to agree with Bart on the dark and deep, though how dare he suggest anyone could be better than the stock at lit.org!

( Posted by: False Dawn [Member] On: February 11, 2004 )





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