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for years i have been in the dark,
for months i have smelled the rotten air of my own flesh,
crawled upon the dirt floor-
and dampened it with my own tears.
but i see a light within the dark clouds.
a warmth that seems to take over my whole being.
it is you.
worn and torn,
Scarred by the harsh hands of time,
i stand up for you.
legs are weak, and hunger is strong-
but for you i'll endure.
will you vanish the hell i have been captured in?
Please, when will love's grace shin on me!
but Alast, you are merely an illusion!
a dream, a hoax!
your eyes are the color of blood, your voice the sound of pain!
long have i dreamed of someone, long have i prayed for the keys.
the key to unlock this hell,
but fait has it, only the love of a women can free me.
till then, im a hallowed man awaiting his judgment,
but who will see me in this darkness?


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theres a darkness within my soul, one that never goes away. the person u see is the bitter me, the one i fear...


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The following comments are for "the inner hell"
by soulblade

wow
very powerful poem, a struggle that many share at one point or another. One minor spelling error "fait" should be "fate" I believe.

Thank you for your comments on My poem recently. I very much appreciate them.

( Posted by: SinamonAngel [Member] On: September 4, 2003 )

Do you know Beaudelaire ?
My god ! You really moved me, you know ! You remind me (especially the style of the beginning) some of the french Beaudelaire's poems I studied and really appreciated when I was young. One of them is "Spleen". Do you know him, and his poems ? Your own is as fascinating as are his, and very vivid !
Very good ! I would like it to be longer !
I have the impression that now I'll have to spend more time in this place, when I don't have so much and I'm going to be obliged to come back here regularly hoping reading more from you ! %@#%!!x%@!#%x,
and re-%@#%!!x%@!#%x ! ! I've been had !

( Posted by: blb_Maryse [Member] On: September 5, 2003 )

The same
Me again !
The worst is that I need a french/english dictionary to write ! So %@#%!!x%@!#%x again !

( Posted by: blb_Maryse [Member] On: September 5, 2003 )

well first off thanks..
well i must say, it pleases me very much to have ppl comment and like it. when i write, i try to only write my feelings, to matyse-thanks for the comment but sadly i havent heard of Beaudelaire-but trust me ill look it up now. thankxs a mill!

( Posted by: soulblade [Member] On: September 5, 2003 )

Very Nice
I love this piece so dark and dismal. I am going to try to write some dark poetry and see how it comes out. You did a superb job. A great read and wonderful flow of darkness.:)

( Posted by: lovesessence [Member] On: September 7, 2003 )





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