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On a cliff,
Looking down,
Ready to plunge,
Into the ground.

Salty tears,
Streak a face,
Feeling the fear,
Of a chase.

Azure hues,
Blank and cold,
Taking THE step,
Confident and bold.

Gravity jerks,
Past rock and tree,
Almost there,
Five seconds minus three.

Colliding with earth,
Death awaits,
For rebirth,
To heavenly gates.

Pale complexion,
Cold and still,
Twisted shoulder,
Shudders up a chill.

Crimson liquid,
Stain the scalp,
Nearly deceased,
Without a doubt.

In the distance,
Hear a sound,
Of sirens searching,
A patient is found.

A sobbing mother,
A stricken father,
There on the stretcher,
Lay their daughter.

Breathing faint,
Eyes shut tight,
Feeling pain,
Upon this night.

“Mom and Dad I’m sorry,
But here I don’t belong,
So please do not worry,
For it won’t be long.”

From the skies,
Comes a light,
A voice is sounded,
“All will be alright.”

A new feeling,
Is revived,
Within the teen,
Death is denied.

The ambulance rushes,
To the infirmary,
To the emergency room,
For the surgery.

Fourteen hours,
Pass them by,
Mother praying,
As relatives arrive.

Out comes the doctor,
Sweat on his brow,
“Your daughter survived,
You can go see her now.”

Sighs of relief,
Erupt throughout the room,
As the kin goes to see,
The one who escaped doom.

Many questions,
Are blurted out,
But she is too weak,
To go on about.

The worst that came,
Now departed,
Leaving them all,
Nevermore parted.

The nurse,
Ushers them out,
“The patient must rest.”
No questions or doubt.

Ivory shades are pulled,
To shut out the light,
As the teen thinks,
“The future is bright.”

The nurse walks out,
And on her way,
She softly whispers,
“Sleep tight, for tomorrow is a new day.”




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The following comments are for "Light of Revival"
by Amaris

loved it
this poem is superb, really liked it. bet it took ages to compose. although i thought it lacked just a teensy bit of bitterness. overall, really good

( Posted by: seniorme [Member] On: June 4, 2004 )

Difficult Subject
Amaris,

I liked the struture and theme of your poem This is a difficult subject and generally I think your way of handling it was very good and it flowed well unfolding the story.

Possibly the most important stanza I feel needs a little more work:

From the skies,
Comes a light,
A voice is sounded,
“All will be alright.”



A voice is sounded, sounds disconected from the true emphasis of this, it's too important.

All will be alright...well I just think a reword would help.

I really liked the piece and this is only a personal opinion that I feel would strengthen it, others may disagree.

A really good write on a hard subject.

Thank you

Ivor

( Posted by: ivordavies [Member] On: June 4, 2004 )

light of revival
Moved so smoothly from beginning to end with the roller coaster ride of emotions throughout...Thanks for the ride. Stephanie M.

( Posted by: EchoMarm [Member] On: April 11, 2009 )





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