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Onward!
Onward, my friend, onward!
For we cannot stay here,
In this desperate place
Where our minds rot
And our feelings chafe
Onward, I say!
Off to new beginnings
Where all the world is fresh
And not a living mesh
Onward! Onward!
Always gallop onward!
For behind is worthless
And this barren land is heartless
Onward! Onward!
Take my hand!
And come with me to the chosen land.


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by False Dawn

sometimes....
Sometimes I enjoy a poem for what it means, how it is presented, its rythm, or for the words themselves. This one I liked for all three. I like your work,the poems I read of yours tonight were all worth it.

( Posted by: scryer [Member] On: September 3, 2003 )

Thanks
Rcallaci, thanks for the comments, though the creative roll happened a while back. These are some I found whilst flicking through the old pieces.

And yes, I noticed that too Penelope. If you lot didn't know me better, you'd think i'd come over all religious with that last line :o

( Posted by: False Dawn [Member] On: September 3, 2003 )





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