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He Slumps motionless in the doorway, his tattered sweater pulled tightly aginst him to ward off the chill. His well-worn crutches, lie within easy reach on the steps. His head, bowed low next to his chest, jerks up suddenly at the sound of someone approaching, and his hand automatically stretches out to beseech a coin or two from the stranger. Ignored, he mutters a muffled epithet to the back of the offending pedestrian, and reaches for the treasure in a torn paper bag at his side, inhaling its contents with one long, continuous gulp, his medals gleaming in the sun!

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Grandma Bea


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The following comments are for "What Price Glory?"
by Beatrice Boyle

I Learned My Lesson
Bea, sorry I never comment on your pieces. This one would have slid by me too. I like it. A good picture of a bad thing.

And Penelope, oo those biting barbs of yours! Write 'em as short as you like. I'll keep quiet.

8/10

( Posted by: Washer [Member] On: September 4, 2003 )

Wet Noodles
Hi Penelope, no, so far I haven't had my 30 lashes with a wet noodle like you have, but give it time! (On second thought, I guess I deserve them as I counted "well-worn" as ONE word making it 101 instead of the required 100!)

Thanks for commenting!

( Posted by: Beatrice Boyle [Member] On: September 5, 2003 )

Why Thank you
I appreciate you stopping by to read it...I haven't been getting too many comments lately, guess with so many new people joining in, there are too many to keep up with. This subject (homeless vets) is dear to my heart. We have become so ungrateful!

( Posted by: Beatrice Boyle [Member] On: September 6, 2003 )

excellent
As a writer of short/flash fiction myself (i just signed up -- material forthcoming) I have to say this is one excellent piece of work. I now have a very intimate picuture of this forgotten hero's life. Well done!

( Posted by: seanairt [Member] On: September 11, 2003 )





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