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The Window

Across the street from me
There sits a little girl
Looking out the window
Looking to the world

It’s just a piece of glass
But it is enough to suffice
To keep her from outside
To keep her from a life

She sits right there all day
And never leaves her chair
Observing all the passerby’s
Wishing to be there

Lifelessly she gazes
At a world she’ll never know
Of a face she’ll never meet
Of a place she’ll never go

I wonder why that little girl
Sits up in her room
Letting her life be controlled
By wretchedness and gloom

I wonder why I watch her
Why I stare at her all day
I wonder why she sits there
And why I never look away






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The following comments are for "The Window"
by Matrix

Like a mirror
I like the ending...like a mirror reflects our image, this work reflects the feelings of the watcher in the face of the gloomy little girl, wonderful poem.

( Posted by: scryer [Member] On: September 3, 2003 )

intriguing
Yes, an intriguing poem. I'm not entirely sure what to make of it. The scene has a sadness to it, but also a sort of sinister undertone, which is there right through, but only really makes itself shown on that last line. Kinda creepy, actually.

Good poem. Not sure that it's worth the 9s and 10s that it's got so far, but I'll happily give it a solid 8/10.

( Posted by: Spudley [Member] On: September 3, 2003 )





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